Sunday, February 17, 2013

Open Prompt Revision #2

2006, Form B. In many works of literature, a physical journey - the literal movement from one place to another - plays a central role. Choose a novel, play, or epic poem in which a physical journey is an important element and discuss how the journey adds to the meaning of the work as a whole. Avoid mere plot summary.

                  The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn is one of the most well known pieces of American literature. Within its’ many lines lies different truths about the current world around Huckleberry Finn, and many different conflicts that people in the world have faced. After reading the title of this novel, we can automatically infer that it is going to be an adventure story, of someone going out on a journey to capture something they need. And we see this very dominantly in this novel. As Huck and Jim travel up the Mississippi River we start to see what they are both in need of. While reading this novel, we see the relationship that forms between Huck and Jim from being on the river, we see that they can be away from the flawed society while on the raft (not completely escaping societal problems), and that they are both on their way to greater freedom.
                  Huck and Jim were already connected from the beginning of the novel. In the beginning, Huck thought of Jim only as a slave, of being property. As they spent more and more time together and traveled down the river, he began to realize how everything he was being taught was flawed, and that Jim was in no way a slave. He was a normal human being. Just like a river, they are forced to accept each other for who they are and they can change their attitudes towards each other. Jim soon becomes Huck’s father figure and he sets examples for Huck to follow.
                  Immediately, we see that the river is a symbol for freedom. After Huck fakes his death to his father, he has a raft that safely carries him down the Mississippi River, well seemingly safe. Once he runs into Jim, they realize they both are going to the same direction, and they make their quest together. We see that they run into troubles when they are off of the water and on land. These troubles show how the societal problems are not going to go away, and they still affect Huck and Jim while they are just leaving the city of St. Petersberg. After they have traveled a bit further down the river, we see another event that shows how land isn’t exactly safe. They stay with an unknown family while Huck pretends to be someone he isn’t, and after a few days of living well, it all goes down hill. There is a mob that breaks out against the family he is staying with. In response, Huck and Jim flee and begin their travels down the river again. We see that the raft is a good source of safety for both Huck and Jim.
                  Throughout the novel, we see many ways in which Huck and Jim are struggling for personal freedom. Originally, Huck goes on this adventure solely for that purpose; for it being a cool adventure and a story to tell. But we see how he is actually escaping from something real, and we see how he is affected by society around him. The teaching of slavery and racism are not accurate, and he wants to get as far away as possible from these beliefs. That goes to say why Jim is fleeing. He wants personal freedom; he wants to find his family that he was torn apart from.
                  Overall, the meaning behind the Mississippi River is a very dominant one in this novel. But the events that occur on the river and the coming of characters are prevalent towards the plot. Both characters discover their true identities by growing a family relationship towards each other, by being away from the flaws of society, and by achieving freedom together. All of the events create these two characters, and provide for a novel depicting society and using satire to show these flaws. The former inexperienced, naïve Huck, transforms into a matured, grown “adult”, while Jim makes a huge jump in roles from being a slave

3 comments:

  1. First off, I would read through the essay again to look at some grammatical problems.

    For example: "Within its’ many lines lies different truths about the current world around Huckleberry Finn, and many different conflicts that people in the world have faced."

    It's = its. Lies = lie. I am also unsure what this sentence means, and I feel like you could clear it up somewhat.

    I'm not sure how Huck and Jim are "like a river". I think you could expand on that.

    I feel like you can analyze more in this piece than you did. It would probably help to talk more about actual meaning in the body paragraphs, rather than only in the conclusion. I can see you almost addressing meaning in several parts, but failing to directly look at it.

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  2. I agree with a lot of what Sam said, but I'd like to add something about avoiding repeated phrases. Especially 'we see,' which isn't incorrect and does a good job of avoiding using 'I' but could also be replaced with 'it shows' or something along those lines, just for a bit of variety. It also feels like your thesis comes at the end of the essay, when talking about family roles and coming into their own. On a first draft, that makes sense because ideas develop as you write, but as an edit it is a little confusing. You have a lot of good ideas with the 'events on land vs. events on the river' idea, but I feel like you tried to expand that one idea over all three body paragraphs, when you could have used some of the things you bring up in your conclusion (satire, family relationships, &c). There's a lot to work with here!

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  3. Hi Julia,

    I think you had a lot of good claims and evidence, but that you can also expand on your warrants a bit more. You did a great job of explaining the story, but you could go deeper into how each part relates back to your thesis. I also agree with Sam and Sarah in that you could fix some of the grammatical and other small errors in your essay. I think the "we see" parts of your essay could be taken out because it sounds a bit too informal for an open prompt. Other than these few suggestions, you have a great essay! Keep it up!

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